There once was this itty bitty small boy,
He really wanted to play with his toy.
He asked his mom but she said no,
You need to go outside and play in the snow.
He decided to go ahead and sled,
So he went to the barn and opened the shed.
He started to walk up the super high hill,
He got so scared his mom made him take a pill.
He got on is sled and started to roll,
He moved so fast he looked like a bull.
He hit a bump and started to tumble,
He moved so fast the sled started to rumble.
He lost control and veered to the right,
There were nothing but trees left in his sight.
He leaned to the right and leaned to the left,
He leaned so hard he had no energy left.
He prayed that he would not crash just in case,
He hoped that a tree would not hit his face.
With next to nothing left that he could do,
He jumped off his sled, landing in doo doo.
He cried so much his mom heard him from home,
She brought an ice pack to put on his dome.
They went back home and she let him warm up,
And brought him some coco in a big cup.
I really like the happy childlike feel the poem gives. The iambic pattern was very well done and thought out. I enjoyed reading your poem! Good job!
ReplyDeleteIt was a very good poem. Every line had ten syllables and still made sense. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGood Job Casey! You did a nice job with the iambic pentameter and it flowed very nicely.
ReplyDeleteCasey, I liked the fact that you occasionally used inner line rhyming. It was a great addition to your poem. Great job.
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